(Post Rock or something)The Bastard (need suggestions)

[guitfnky]

I've been working on this for a bit too long now and I'm starting to question my judgment... What else does this need?



I feel like the intro, before it starts really building up, might need something else. And I've sort of come to like the weird little flubs in the "lead" guitar track. I was going to rerecord that, but now I'm not sure. Does it detract from the song?

[Benedict]

The intro loop over on the right feels far to static after a while. It starts to annoy me.

The guitar sound is hissy which is initially kinda cool but there is no focus even by 1:06. This starts to improve by 1:45 and finally a sense of direction is there which I do like. Sadly that doesn't seem to build to anything. like there is no journey, just this place that I spin around in and get lost. I would like to see a few variations and a second idea to create that sense of conversation that Fleetwood Mac's Albatross does so well (and is not a million miles from your piece). Remember that an instrumental needs a strong focus as there is no vocal to lead the listener.

If you get that sorted then I thing you have something rather good, and I'd want the album.

The guitar on the left is probably a bit loud.

[guitfnky]

Thanks Benedict, that's very helpful.

The static bit at the beginning was something I was concerned about, so I'll try to do something about that for sure. The guitar is hissy (thanks, effects pedals), so I'll try and filter some of that out. Definitely want to keep that take though, since it's got the feel I want.

I'm a little more on the fence with the idea of adding another part. The vision was to just have these few parts that flow into and out of one another, and keep building, which I'm actually pretty happy with already, for the most part. I'll have to give that some thought.

[cosignsessions]

pressed play with the intensions to take notes. I just ended up listening instead. Cool track. Benedict gave the best advise and a reference song to help make his point. I will certainly listen again if you post an updated mix.

[Benedict]

Thanks.

I wouldn't spend a second, 'fixing' the hiss as it doesn't need it. I thought t actually added character. Far too many mixes these days are perfect - and so soulless.

[jappe]

Hi!

A pleasant sound in this one, I like it! I agree with Benedict about loud left guitar.
Perhaps some automated guitar effects could fit? I wonder also if it would be an idea to let the guitar fade from front to back occasionally?

[guitfnky]

Thanks everyone! The kind words are very appreciated! I'm going to play around with some of these ideas to try and tighten it up. I wasn't able to cut much of the hiss out of the main track anyway, without changing the vibe, Benedict, so that's good to hear. I'm with you on the whole character thing.

[luimen]

Stop worrying with this tune. Its done and its beautiful!
Sounds a lot better than some post rock bands (sound wise)
Start another one and have fun

[guitfnky]

Wow, thanks luimen, I really appreciate it! I may not have a choice, as it seems I'm having trouble finding the file, for some reason, haha!

[Zac]

I completely agree with luimen. It's a beautiful song. Sounds great to me. Really nice distorted guitar at the end... might have liked some of that a bit earlier??? But it's special as it is.

[guitfnky]

Thanks, Zac, I'm really happy you enjoy it! And thanks for the awesome comment too!

[Pete B]

Nice. I agree that you can consider it musically finished. It just needs you singing on it.

[Peter]

Yeah this is pretty solid! Thanks for sharing...nice tune.

[guitfnky]

Thanks Peter, really appreciate the listen and comment!

And Pete B, I'd thought about doing vocals on it, but I'm not sure I want to risk mangling it, haha! Thanks for the feedback!